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I am an obsessive, possessive compulsive
Besotted by your flawed brand of perfection,
My love for you is a grasping fist -
Crushing you, slowly suffocating,
Squeezing the breath - and the resistance –
from your lungs, from your soul…
Constriction breeds subtle friction,
You flail now and then like a landed fish,
But you can’t escape me darling…
You can’t get away because you don’t want to,
Your willpower has corroded, has eroded to dust
I am your heroin, killing you softly as the old song goes,
Caressing your heart into fatal submission…

Oh I don’t deny, sometimes the drug wears off,
And you have a bad trip -
Sometimes my whip lash fails to strike…
And your dormant defiance rises with bullish temerity…
Sometimes I nearly lose my hold, and the fist weakens, flaccidly…
Then I have to rein you in and force a harsher bit between your gritted teeth
Ha ha, oh yes, it can be a cat and mouse game, this romance,
A tenuous balance of shifting powers,
Like tectonic plates, seething beneath the surface…
The scales tip seductively in your favor, then in mine -
Sometimes your fingers slip round my throat,
The manacles of my love asphyxiating…
Sometimes I lead you by the ring in your nose, my bovine beauty –
Sometimes it all becomes too much, like black waters rising,
Closing over my humble head,
And I start to choke…to drown…
But in the end, my fingers are locked round your heart,
And if I go down – baby, so do you
©2009-2010 ~melancholy-delilah
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.............this is about me and the drummer...........

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:iconmaranga:
Love it, love it, LOVE it!

Haha... Are you in England yet? Is our poetic air conditioning your humble head?

I love the vigour and the passion, of course, but the controlled linguistic exuberance echoing your control over the "bovine beauty"... :)

I'd tinker with the punctuation here and there, maybe go for "I'm" at the start (or " I AM")...and I might vacillate between "clutching" and "grasping" for your "fist"... But I only cavil at the tectonic plates, for they do not seethe below the surface; they ARE the surface (the lithosphere) and beneath them lies the asthenosphere, which, as I understand it, does not "seethe"... I have to quote from Wikipedia here, as it is a strangely beautiful poetry: "Although solid, the asthenosphere has relatively low viscosity and shear strength and can flow like a liquid on geological timescales." I know... I'm sorry... 99% of readers will embrace your poetic truth! Or they would have... lol

Anyway... I'm faving this, because it's great!

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Believe me, you're better off not thinking about my :gallery: poems.
I live on Free Rice.
:iconmelancholy-delilah:
Aww...you've made me blush now LOL Thank you so much. I'll check that bit about the tectonic plates but I'll probably just leave it how it is to tell the truth, I'm not too bothered by people becoming aware of my glaring lack of geo-knowledge. Thanks so much for your compliments and critique, I really appreciate it :hug: I'm not in England yet, but I will be in the next three or four days...I'm hoping for good weather when I land but knowing England that probably won't happen LOL

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"I woke up today
I wish I felt something
The odour of my apathy
just might be true
I want to be the things I see
The pilgrim that is me
But I know I ain't that free..." - Suburban Me, IN FLAMES
:iconmaranga:
I'd leave it too ;) it works, after all! But when you have two minutes spare you might listen to art colliding with science at [link] (1 minute 53 secs, but I allowed for download time)

It's sunny here right now: classic blue skies and fluffy white (greyish) clouds... but that, of course, is no indication. Welcome "home" anyway :hug:

--
Believe me, you're better off not thinking about my :gallery: poems.
I live on Free Rice.
:iconmelancholy-delilah:
Ooh sounds like great weather, I'd better get over there fast before it changes its mind LOL. Thanks for the welcome m'dear :) :hug:

--
"I woke up today
I wish I felt something
The odour of my apathy
just might be true
I want to be the things I see
The pilgrim that is me
But I know I ain't that free..." - Suburban Me, IN FLAMES
:iconmaranga:
Haha... It's snowing now! :roflmao:

--
Believe me, you're better off not thinking about my :gallery: poems.
I live on Free Rice.
:iconmelancholy-delilah:
i knew it couldn't last LOL

--
"I woke up today
I wish I felt something
The odour of my apathy
just might be true
I want to be the things I see
The pilgrim that is me
But I know I ain't that free..." - Suburban Me, IN FLAMES

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